|Credit: Margaret Dean|
Original: Fate has love and death plans for Holly McCray, whether she believes in him or not.
Revision One: Fate has love-and-death plans for Holly McCray, but she's never been one to accept fate without question, and she's not about to start now.
Revision Two: A fae warrior willing to risk his life to keep a promise, a woman bold enough to question Fate, and a prophecy that will bind them together.
Whatta ya think? Any better? Or back to the drawing board?