I really should be working, but crawling the blogosphere is so much more fun. Now, don't worry, I'm still going to participate in the No Fear Blogfest, but I just now ran across another blogfest for today called The 99th Page Blogfest hosted by Erinn, Holly, Pam and Quita, um, and Alicia. I've seen all of them attributed on several sites. Anyway, for this blogfest participants are to post page 99 of your WIP.Pretty simple, huh? And since I already have page 99 written, it's as easy as copy, paste, post!
When reading this page, and all the others, you should focus on and answer the following 3 questions:
1. Would you turn to page 100?
2. Why or why not?
3. Based on what you read, how likely would you be to buy the book?
My submission to this blogfest is page 99 of my paranormal romance, Faerie Fate, which is currently in the revision/polishing stage before I start requerying (the short version of the story is that I queried once, realized the story needed rewriting, I've done the rewrite, now I'm preparing to requery).
Here it is:
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“So you’re empathic to me just like I’m empathic to you?”
He nodded as he sliced a loaf of bread and placed a plate of it on the table in front of her. This close the details of his tattoos were more evident. Organic in design, the vines wrapped his arms and twisted across his chest, winding a pattern around symbols she didn’t recognize, but reminding her of graffiti. As if it had a life of its own her hand reached out to trace them. His skin was warm under her fingers, but pebbled with gooseflesh at her touch, followed by a much more obvious reaction further down.
“For instance,” he said, his voice husky, “I can sense how much you want to touch me.”
Her brows shot up and she felt a blush bloom on her cheeks as she pulled her hand back. “Your tattoos are beautiful,” she said, knowing it wouldn’t do any good to deny what he could clearly sense. She cleared her throat. “Don’t we have a lot to do today?”
“We’ve got plenty of time. Council doesn’t meet for several more hours,” he said, tracing her ear with his finger, sending shivers over her skin.
She closed her eyes and swallowed. “Shadow,” she said, opening her eyes to meet his. “There’s an obvious attraction between us. I know that. I can barely stop from throwing myself in your arms right now, but I’m not ready to make the kind of commitment that being soul mates implies, and I’m afraid that if we sleep together you’ll assume I’ve made that commitment.”
“Fate chose us for each other, Holly. The commitment’s already made whether you accept it or not.”
“What if I don’t believe in Fate?”
“Just because you don’t believe in something doesn’t mean it isn’t so.”
“Well, I prefer to believe I have the free will to choose the person I’ll spend my life with.”
“And what if I’m that person?”
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So, there you have it, page 99 of Faerie Fate. What do you think?
*p.s. - I'll be back later this afternoon for the No Fear Blogfest. I promise!
21 comments:
This just screams paranormal romance! Probably because it is. I don't know if I'd turn the page, though frankly, I love the writing. I really, really, liked your description of the tattoo. And you've most certainly got some good sexual tension going on here.
It just don't think one page is enough to get attached to the characters.
I love your MC's name. Haha. Too few characters representing the Holly's out there! ;) I'd keep reading.
I didn't have any trouble getting into this and I like the way your writing flows. Hot moment - I'd keep reading.
I like her run away from fate song....and his gotta love me dance. I would keep going to find out if they make a little music...grin. I like that she is focused on his tattoo, not his eyes, hair or cloths. It is a shy attraction overlayed with bravado that makes it work.
Yes, I would keep reading. I have to know what's going to happen next!
Whew! I'm fanning myself off right now. I'd keep reading for sure. You're writing flows very nicely and I like your descriptions- I love the tattoos!
I would definitely turn to page 100! I want to know what she says in return.
I really like the way you write. I'd want to start from the beginning though before turning to 100.
I'm a sucker for well-written paranormal romance so I'd definitely read on.
Thanks for participating!
Super interesting! I would've kept reading :)
Ahhh! I can't believe you left me hanging like that! What happens next? That was quite the sparking exchange. Great post.
Edge of Your Seat Romance
Very nice, effective. I really like the way you handled their attraction, keeping up the tension, drawing in the reader, but not overdoing it, not breaking up the flow. You gained my trust right there, and I'd want to read on to see what's going on with these two.
I like this a lot:
“Just because you don’t believe in something doesn’t mean it isn’t so.”
and I'm really interested to see how you play out the empathy gift in this story. I'd read more ^_^
Hi,
I'd like to know if he finally gets Holly, so yes I'd be reading on! ;)
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Sexy and a debate about free will! Nice. :)
Yes, yes yes I would keep reading until the end. awesome
Thanks for joining in on teh fun
I like that she is so upfront. I like his reaction to her. I would turn the page. Thanks for sharing.
I like the tension, but maybe just a little too much description to hook me (then again, I've been reading so much 1st person lately, I might have been thrown off by not knowing exactly who the mc was).
erica
I liked it. As a huge sucker for bad boys, Shadow draws me in with his overconfident, sexy ways (yes, all that from one page). I'd read on.
Marie, http://marierearden.blogspot.com
This is kind of intriguing. I like the dialogue, the tattoo.
I don't often read paranormal or romance, but I'd turn the page.
Hawt! without being overwrought. I dig it. I am not a paranormal reader, generally speaking, but this really piques my interest! Thanks for sharing!!
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